literature

Friendship

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Literature Text

Lots of knots
Tied to single string
Connected with each other
By this single thing
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:star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Technique
:star::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

That is quite cute although it is not too flashy. It didn't especially catch my eye so I would consider maybe adding some more words. Its good how the poem rolls across your tongue as you say it though. This is quite original as normally the poems are about other things. Maybe try to make it a bit longer so it doesn't take about 5 seconds to read. Then it makes people want to comment more as it seems that you have put more effort into it. Your poem is rhyming, which is sometimes a good thing and sometimes a bad thing. In your case, It is a good thing.